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Karakuridôji Ultimo

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A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for December 2008.

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I've listed this article for peer review for GA-class. A section I would like to be reviewed is the Media section. Comments. I honestly don't know what else needs to be done so i'll take any comments. : )

Thanks, – J U M P G U R U ^{■ask㋐㋜㋗■} 00:00, 7 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement.

Article needs a copyedit to clean up the language and for typos. I do not think it is up to GA standards with its current language.
- For example "it's" is a contraction for "it is", but "it's" is often used where the possessive "its" should be used.
- Or should it be "Mt. Fuji" instead of Mt. Fuzi?
- Or this sentence Also a man in Central Tokyo has invested into the moment and member K found Vice's arm and planned to take all of it's power. - I do not know what "has invested into the moment" means, the "it's" error is there, and I am not sure what it means to take the power from a detached arm.
The plot does not make clear to me which robot is good and which is evil.
Given the one critical review cited, quoting so much of the Stan Lee press releases might be seen as being too POV?

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:36, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! I fixed the "it's" errors, I make them alot. Sorry bout that. : P Mt. Fuzi is actually what they called it for some reason. – J U M P G U R U ^{■ask㋐㋜㋗■} 05:50, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I changed that one sentence to Member K found Vice's powerful shape-shifting arm and planned to obtain all of its power. If that makes more sense. : P – J U M P G U R U ^{■ask㋐㋜㋗■} 05:54, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]