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Larrys Creek

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This has made good article, with some additions since. I am interested in general suggestions for improvement and if reviewers believe this could potentially be a Featured Article (I am not sure the topic is substantial enough). Basically, I have made most of the edits to this article and I would appreciate more input and feedback on it. I am working on other Pennsylvania creek articles and this is the model for those. Thanks for any feedback, Ruhrfisch 04:53, 12 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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WOULD SOMEONE PLEASE LOOK AT THIS ARTICLE AND REVIEW IT? I am very sorry to 'shout' but I am hoping to get someone's attention (and thanks again to AndyZ for the helpful semi-automated suggestions). Thanks, Ruhrfisch 16:08, 6 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • A few things I noticed:
    • in Lycoming County, Pennsylvania in the comma missing after Pennsylvania
    • The second sentence is a a bit too long
    • The Great Shamokin Path crossed the creek near its mouth,[5] where Larry Burt, the first settler (for whom Larrys Creek is named) also lived. comma missing after settler
    • and coal and iron mines extra "and"
    • Some words like northwest don't need to be linked – see WP:CONTEXT
    • the village of Cogan House, then under the Larrys Creek Covered Bridge missing and
    • It is 90 feet (27 m) long and a Burr arch truss bridge. I think it sounds slightly better without the "and a"
    • Camp Kiwanis, and the New Tribes Institute, a camp for preparing Christian missionaries. in lists of 2 items, the comma isn't necessary (and could a little bit be provided for Camp Kiwanis also?)
    • The Great Shamokin Path crossed the creek at a ford near its mouth, however, no trails of the indigenous peoples are recorded as having followed Larrys Creek north.[5] comma before however should be semicolon, or however should be changed to but
    • Lycoming County was formed from Northumberland County prompting further growth missing comma
  • Thanks, AZ t 20:49, 6 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks so much - I believe these have all been addressed now. Ruhrfisch 05:01, 7 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]


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  • The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, AZ t 14:07, 14 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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