Wikipedia:Peer review/Lewisville, Texas/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I've made some significant changes to the city's page in order to create an accurate and involving history while also giving important facts throughout the article. I'm more interested in putting up an involving, accurate, and interesting article than just getting a higher rating, so any constructive feedback or help would be very helpful.
Thanks, Runfellow (talk) 04:40, 14 November 2011 (UTC)
- Well for one thing the lead doesn't follow WP:LEAD, you may also want to get a copy-edit done (WP:GOCE/REQ) for better prose, some of the image captions aren't very good, what encyclopedic information does the images show readers that the article itself doesn't show? Saying "Lewisville Lake at sunset." isn't that all helpful of what Lewisville looks like, we all know what a sunset looks like ;-) take a look at other GA-Class or FA-Class city articles and look at their captions as a model. Why is the "golf" section written as a list? This is just a general note (had to comment because my favorite singer had lived in Texas). Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 00:47, 19 November 2011 (UTC)
- Comments from Jappalang
- File:Lewisville logo.png is a logo, not the Seal of the city. "The logo may be obtained from Lewisville, Texas." is not a good source; name specifically which webpage this image was obtained from. I fail to see how looking at this non-free logo helps me further understand the city. As such, it fails WP:NFCC criterion 8. Furthermore, this image is no longer the city's adopted logo...[1]
- The lede is supposed to be a summary of the key points in the main text (WP:LEDE). As such, the current lede is too skimpy.
- What is a "clubfitter"?
- If it is a "major hub" and a "golf mecca", what impact does the golf industry have on the city?
- What is "a 7.4 paddling trail"?
- There may be lots of data in Demographics, but they are useless to me as presented. What do the numbers mean in terms of social impact and relationships? Are there any reliable sources that examine the trends?
- It is not needed to list every council member and department head. The project's aim is for articles of encyclopaedic scope, not the yellow pages or a city hall guidebook. What is the political history of the city? Do they lean towards the left or the right (in American speak)? Was there any significant changes in how it was administered?
- The list of Roads with their highway symbols is not appealing and is non-compliant with an encylopaedic goal.
- It is needless to come up with a Top 10 employer list. Talking about the top 3 or topmost employer would be enough. It would be better to discuss what companies were significant to the city instead. Which contributed the most to its development and how? The breakdown of the citizens' income lacks a bit of explanation. What is their median income compared to the rest of the country or region?
Mostly, it is about the context. Data alone would not help people understand the subject. It is often better to tell a story about the subject, using the figures and names as support. Have a look at Poulton-le-Fylde. Jappalang (talk) 02:19, 25 November 2011 (UTC)