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List of Giro d'Italia general classification winners

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I'm nominating this list for Peer review, as I'd like a few suggestions on how to improve the article before I take it to FLC. Cheers NapHit (talk) 18:32, 3 September 2010 (UTC)

• Comments Sandman888 (talk) 15:25, 15 September 2010 (UTC)
• The image of the pink sweater might be a derivative, but I'm no expert on the rules.
• table:
  • "Sponsor/team" Surely it was not Italy who were the team, but the Italian cyclist association or similar?
  • Consider removing the years it was not held and add a note to the previous and subsequent year. It'll make it much better sort-wise.
  • "time/points" what is the first couple of entries? Hours? They don't sort right either.
  • "stage wins" doesn't sort properly on Firefox on XP; if you sort it thrice it messes up.

Ruhrfisch comments: This looks fairly good to me - in addition to Sandman's comments, here are some suggestions for improvement.

• Does the first sentence really meet WP:LEAD? The article should begin with a declarative sentence telling the nonspecialist reader what (or who) is the subject. The general classification winners are not even mentioned in the current first sentence
• I think of neighboring countries as being adjacent, or perhaps no more than one country away. The Netherlands does not meet this criterion in The race usually covers approximately 3,500 kilometres (2,200 mi), passing through Italy and neighbouring countries such as the Netherlands.[2]
• I would change the caption to something like Fausto Coppi, who won the Giro d'Italia five times between 1940 and 1953.
• Could the last sentence of the lead be more concise as something like The current champion is Ivan Basso of the Liquigas-Doimo team , who won the 2010 Giro d'Italia.[6]
• Where possible, the article would benefit from switching from passive voice to active voice, so for example The Giro d'Italia was established in 1909 by newspaper La Gazzetta dello Sport, after the success of the Tour de France which was inaugurated in 1903. could just be In 1909 the newspaper La Gazzetta dello Sport established the Giro d'Italia, inspired by the success of the Tour de France, which started in 1903.
• Per WP:MOSQUOTE, this needs "quotation marks", not single quotes as in: Nicknamed the 'Iron Man of Tuscany' for his endurance...
• I think this needs a general copyedit - this needs at least some commas, and it might read better in active voice and it would also help to say who offered him the 22,000 lire So dominant was Binda that in 1930 he was called to the head office of La Gazzetta dello Sport where he was accused of ruining the race and was offered 22,000 lire to be less dominant which he refused.[9]
• Problem sentence: Spandiard Alberto Contador of Astana was the winner in 2008, he chose to focus on the Tour the following year, Denis Menchov was the victor.[22] Spandiard is not spelled correctly, and it is not super clear if Contador actually raced in the Giro in 2010 or not, and the year Mnchov won is also less clear than it could be. Perhaps somethng like Spandiard Alberto Contador of Astana was the winner in 2008; the following year he raced in the Tour de France instead, and Denis Menchov was the Giro victor.[22]

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:27, 23 September 2010 (UTC)