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List of National Treasures of Japan (Shrines)

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I've listed this list for peer review because I created it from scratch and would like to get some feedback also with regard to a nomination at Wikipedia:Featured list candidates. Thanks, bamse (talk) 10:26, 22 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Brianboulton comments

The title has been moved since this article was nominated for review. It has been changed from something consistent with other lists in this series, to something ungrammatical and inconsistent. At present the title shown in the text is different from the formal article title. I strongly recommend you revert to the previous version. done, all list titles are now consistent bamse (talk) 10:03, 30 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
The main map of Japan is floating in unenclosed space, with no textual description and no explanation as to what the different coloured areas signify. No explanation is given for the small enclosed map alongside. done
There is virtually no text to this article (94 words of readable prose outside the tables). Although this is also the case with the others in this series, most lists have rather more descriptive text than this. There are many facts that you could include in the lead to make the list more interesting to the general reader. For example:-
- ~~What religion or religions these shrines are associated with~~ done, added Shinto in the lead bamse (talk) 04:49, 13 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- ~~What proportion of the total number of such shrines in Japan does this number of 50 represent?~~ done, added total number of shrines bamse (talk) 04:49, 13 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- ~~At what date was the "national treasure" category established?~~ done, added date bamse (talk) 04:49, 13 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- What was the basis of deciding that these 50 were national treasures? Is this a closed list or are others added to it from time to time?

These, and possibly other facts, could be the basis of a proper, informative lead.

The main table is broadly in line with those of others, but lacks important information, such as ~~the age of each~~done, and the "remarks" column seems unimaginatively used.
The biggest problem with the list is that it all seems to come from a single source, a Japanese-language website with no English translation. It is therefore impossible for non-Japanese speakers to check anything in the list. This is English Wikipedia: are there no English websites, or other sources, that can be linked to the list?

This is about the limit of what I can say, being unable to verify the information. I hope it will be of some help to you.

Brianboulton (talk) 20:56, 27 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks a lot for the review. I will try to improve the list accordingly. As for the source, yes it is in Japanese, but it is the official source (from the government agency that decides on the nominations), therefore not outdated and likely less prone to errors. I am not aware of a complete list in any other language. bamse (talk) 01:00, 28 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]