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List of Neon Genesis Evangelion characters

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I greatly expanded this article a year ago now, almost entirely by translating it from the it.wiki equivalent I personally wrote. I would like to propose it as a candidate for FA status, but before a FAN it is certainly better to hear how it can be improved. Note: I am not a native English speaker, so any advice on prose, grammar, syntax or exposition is especially welcome. Thanks, TeenAngels1234 (talk) 10:52, 11 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Conception:

There seems to be a clash between the Sadamoto concept art and the quote.
Remember to wikilink in the first paragraph of the body
Explain what is Nadia
Is there a translation to what does Kikakusho means?
I would move the image to the first mention of Sadamoto since he is the one made them.

Characters:

Since Shinji and others have their own articles, I would suggest trimming these sections
Remember to reference voices or change them to prose.
The one story characters from a single game or other project might not be needed here.

Reception

The quote from popularity seems kinda random and a bit of undue weight that could parahrased.
I would recommend giving each paragraph each own main topic to make them stand out. Maybe one paragraph could be a general approach, another could be Sadamoto's designs, another could be psycholgycal approach.

BTW, I am also having a peer review here for a movie that I'm sure you have seen its related articles. So I'd appreciate any related feedback. Cheers.Tintor2 (talk) 23:12, 11 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments. I'm currently workin' on them.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 13:19, 20 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

xn--5ck5a4gob177z170cgian33q.com doesn't seem to be a RS. --BlackShadowG (talk) 12:53, 28 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@BlackShadowG: Deleted. Thank you.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 19:16, 28 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Since it's a TV series, maybe it would be better to add a table to show the main and guest characters for each episode? (like List of The Last of Us (TV series) characters#Season 1) --BlackShadowG (talk) 12:28, 27 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@BlackShadowG: Sorry. I just noticed your advice. Well, normally yes, but keep in mind this is an anime, so it does not follow the normal TV series guidelines and it would be kinda superfluous to me to add a table.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 17:46, 23 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@TeenAngels1234: It has been over a month since the last comment on this PR. Are you still interested in getting feedback, or can this be closed? Z1720 (talk) 13:28, 5 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Z1720: I'm open to new feedback and I'm still interested, but unfortunately it seems that no new suggestions are coming.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 17:40, 5 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@TeenAngels1234: I suggest posting a request on the Wikiprojects attached to this article asking for feedback. You can also take a look at MOS:ALT and ensure the article complies with that, as that is commonly checked for at WP:FLC. Z1720 (talk) 18:57, 6 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

End?

TeenAngels1234, this PR has been open for over half a year at this point- on a quick look, I think it'll do fine at FLC. I'd be happy to review it if you take it there. MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 22:15, 14 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

MyCatIsAChonk Thank you. Yes, I think it can be closed. Maybe we should wait just two or three days pending any - unlikely, but possible - last-minute opinions, and then we can safely close.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 21:43, 15 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]