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List of Olympic medalists in equestrian

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take it to Featured List status. I've never worked seriously on a list before, and never taken one through FLC, so comments geared towards that process in particular would be much appreciated.

Thanks, Dana boomer (talk) 02:38, 22 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: This list looks well-done to me, a reader who knows next to nothing about these events. I have just a few minor suggestions having to do with issues related to prose or style.

Lead

"Competitors in the modern pentathalon event also have to complete an equestrian show jumping course... " - I'd be inclined to add a hyphen to "show jumping"; i.e, "show-jumping course".
"while the youngest was 16 year old Luiza Almeida of Brazil" - Hyphens here too: "16-year-old Luiza Almeida".

Heads and subheads

Lowercase "p" in "program" in the "Current Program" section head?
Lowercase "i" in the subhead "Dressage, Individual"?
Lowercase "t" in the subhead "Dressage, Team"?
Lowercase "i" in the subhead "Eventing, Individual"?
Lowercase "t" in the subhead "Eventing, Team"?
Lowercase "i" in the subhead "Show jumping, Individual"?
Lowercase "t" in the subhead "Show jumping, Team"?
Lowercase "e" in the section head "Discontinued Events"?
Ditto for the other heads and subheads below these that use capital letters on any word except the first word?

References

"pp. 24-25" in citation 2 needs an en dash rather than a hyphen in the page range. Ditto for pp. 14-15 in citation 5.
The date formatting (August 7, 2008) in citation 8 is out of sync with the date formatting elsewhere in the references.
Citation 10 has a typo: "The IOC medal database showns two more team members... ". This should be "shows". Also, I'd recommend a semicolon rather than a comma before "however".

General

MOS:BOLD strongly advises against double bolding. Several heads or subheads in the article are double-bolded because parts are wikilinked; the linking doubles the bolding of the automatically bolded head or subhead. Since the linked parts are already linked in the lead, I don't think it's necessary to link them again. Unlinking would solve the double-bolding problem. "Dressage, individual" is an example of what I'm alluding to.

I hope these few suggestions prove helpful. Finetooth (talk) 04:42, 2 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth, thank you very much for your comments. I think I have taken care of all of the issues listed above. If you have any further comments or suggestions, please let me know. Dana boomer (talk) 18:26, 2 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]