Wikipedia:Peer review/List of Sailor Moon episodes/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to get it to Featured List status.
Thanks, TheLeftorium 19:46, 11 October 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- What is there looks pretty good to me, although I do not normally work on anime articles.
- In the lead, since the fifth season was never released in North America, should this sentence It was released and dubbed in North America by DiC Entertainment and Cloverway.[1][3] be changed to something like The first four seasons have been released and dubbed in North America by DiC Entertainment and Cloverway.[1][3]?
Done
- Language clean up In 2001, ADV Films released the English dubs of the first two seasons
in a[on ?] 20 VHS volumes.[6] The two first seasons weretaken to[released on 14 Region 1 DVDs] in 2002 by ADV, released over fourteen Region 1 DVDs.[7]
- Done
- I would refer to the 3rd and 4th seasons by their names in the lead - the lead is a summary of the article and these are important enough to name in the lead
- Done
- Biggest problem I see is that the episode lists have no inline citations - I assume they could have one or two refs in the header of each list (all come from one or two sources)
- Done
- I would explain why the dubbed episodes do not match up with the original episodes in the intro to the first and second seasons, not wait until the third season intro.
- Done Can you read it through to see if it's OK?
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:14, 19 October 2008 (UTC)
- Thanks for reviewing, I believe I have addressed all the points above. I left a question further up. --TheLeftorium 11:42, 19 October 2008 (UTC)
- I read the season intro paragraphs and they are helpful - now it does seem a bit odd that the last two seasons do not have any introcutory text. Could you add a sentence or two before those too? Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:52, 20 October 2008 (UTC)