Wikipedia:Peer review/List of music releases from Fame Academy contestants/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to see what improvements should be made before nominating it for Featured List. Can people comment upon references, quality of prose and the general format of the list.
Thanks, 03md 21:21, 6 June 2009 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Seems generally well done, here are some suggestions for improvement, mostly minor points.
- I know this is in the lists (tables) already, but I would add the dates (month and year, or at least year) when the debut singles peaked in the charts to provide context for the reader
- Added dates
- Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase, so change as one example The runner-up from the first series, Sinead Quinn, signed a record deal with Mercury Records[7], the same company as Sneddon, ...
- Done
- I would add the rank / finish position of each contestant to the table. This is given for some artists (Lemar, winners), but not all. I think this is interesting enough to include.
- Done
- The notes are confusing because there is not a direct link from the place they refer to, to the note. There is a system used in several articles such as El Greco that would work here. {{Ref_label}} and {{Note_label}}
- Done
- Fame Academy is the link (and first two words in the article). WP:See also says Links already included in the body of the text are generally not repeated in "See also", ...
- Removed see also link
- Prose looks decent - I made minor comma edits. May want to not look at the article for a few days, print it out and then read it out loud and see how it sounds as a way to polish the prose.
- Would it make sense to list the tracks and artists for the three Fame Academy albums? None of them has its own article, so this might be the place to do it.
- I have wikilinked to the tracklisting on the main Fame Academy article. At least the first album would be notable for its own page as it reached number 2 in the album chart so I may create an individual page
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 18:02, 14 June 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks for all your comments. They have been extremely useful. 03md 09:02, 16 June 2009 (UTC)
- Glad to be of help, thanks for your work on articles Ruhrfisch ><>°° 19:45, 25 June 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks for all your comments. They have been extremely useful. 03md 09:02, 16 June 2009 (UTC)