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List of number-one albums of 2007 (U.S.)

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I've listed this article for peer review to check the quality of the prose.

Thanks, Efe (talk) 00:36, 4 March 2009 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: Since I did the other, I thought I might as well do this one too.

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• Not every reader will understand EP unless it is also spelled out on first use.

• I think the link will help that and the fact that most of the article use EP instead of the full word. --Efe (talk) 08:09, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• "albums the reached peak" - Same problem as the other article.

• Fixed. --Efe (talk) 08:09, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• "beginning December of this year" - "This year" is ambiguous.

• Reworded to "beginning in December". "This year" is redundant. --Efe (talk) 08:09, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• "Its four-week run was consecutive, becoming the first Christmas album to have achieved the feat in the chart's 51-year history" - Since the run didn't become an album, this should be re-cast. How about "It became the first Christmas album in the chart's 51-year history to have a four-week run as number one."?

• Yes. Confusing. Changed a bit. --Efe (talk) 08:09, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• "Following Groban's appearance at" - "On" rather than "at"?

• I think "at" is grammatical? --Efe (talk) 08:09, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• "Following Groban's appearance at The Oprah Winfrey Show, the album reached number-one in its seven weeks on the chart fueled by 405,000 units sales, becoming Groban's best sales week ever." - The chart wasn't fueled. Suggestion: "After Groban's appearance on the Oprah Winfrey Show, the album reached number one during its seven weeks on the chart. Sales of 405,000 units led to Groban's best sales week ever and the album's rise on the chart."

• Revised. --Efe (talk) 08:09, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• "It is one of the albums with biggest first-week sales of 2007, accumulating 615,000 copies." - "Accumulating" doesn't seem like the right word. How about "Its sale of 615,000 copies in its first week made it one of the top albums in this category."?

• Revised. --Efe (talk) 08:09, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• "American singer Alicia Keys' As I Am also topped the chart for four weeks, although non-consecutive" - Perhaps "although they were non-consecutive"?

• As suggested. --Efe (talk) 08:09, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• "Rapper Jay-Z scored his 10th number-one album, American Gangster, giving him the distinction of the second act, tying with Elvis Presley, for most number ones in the history of Billboard 200, only behind band The Beatles with 19." - Something's gone awry here. I'm not sure what "the second act" refers to. "Second place" perhaps? The last phrase seems to be missing a word as well. Suggestion: "Rapper Jay-Z produced his 10th number-one album, American Gangster. This put him in second place in this category, tied with Elvis Presley, who had the most number ones in the history of Billboard 200 except for the The Beatles, who had 19."

I hope these suggestions are helpful. Finetooth (talk) 16:49, 8 March 2009 (UTC)

All done. Thanks for the review, Finetooth. --Efe (talk) 08:09, 13 March 2009 (UTC)