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M15 Halftrack

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I've listed this article for peer review because I am just making sure there's no problems before sending this to FAC again. I would like comments about any grammatical errors or any technical terms that should be changed.

Thanks, Tomandjerry311 (need to talk?) 14:49, 21 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Hpesoj00:

Looking at the talk section, I see that there was some discussion about the title of the article, and it looks like the hyphen in "half-track" was dropped due to the result of a Google Books search. The Half-track article and M3 Half-track article both use hyphens (though M2 Half Track Car is all over the place), and a general Google search shows that "M15 half-track" and "M15 halftrack" get comparable results, as do "half-track" and "halftrack". I don't think books are inherently more reliable than other sources, and in this case, since "M15 half[-]track" is an unofficial name, I believe it best to use the technically correct spelling. The TM 9-2800 Standard Military Motor Vehicles 1943 uses the hyphenated spelling, and I believe this is the spelling this article should use. I believe there should be some coordination between "half-track" articles on Wikipedia to get this consistent.

20,800 lb in 10.5 short (US) tons, not 9.45.

That was 9.45 metric tons, but I fixed the measurement according to Hunnicutt.--Tomandjerry311 (need to talk?) 15:20, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"the M2 Halftrack mounting a 37 millimeter (1.5 in) gun" – This sounds like the half-track is being mounted onto the gun. Would it be better the other way around? Done
Is "superior placed" a technical term? I can't find the meaning on Google.
Is it usual to quote the wheelbase in inches, while all other measurements are quoted in feet and inches?

Since that term rarely shows up in articles, I'm not sure if there's a consensus on what units should be used. However, both Hunnicutt and Berndt both use inches, so I just used inches.--Tomandjerry311 (need to talk?) 15:19, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I am a little unsure about the "T28" section (I added the heading). It currently read as if the T1A1 MGMC project resulted in the T28 by adding a 37 mm gun to the M2 half-track car. Is this the correct interpretation?

I'm relatively certain that no subheader is necessary.--Tomandjerry311 (need to talk?) 23:29, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"A total of 680 M15s were produced in 1943 by White and Autocar before the considerable stress this mount placed on the M3 chassis, which resulted in its replacement with the M54 mount." – This sentence is grammatically incorrect.
"The resulting combination with the M3A1 Halftrack chassis" – Resulting from what? This doesn't flow well from the previous paragraph.
Why are "T19s" and "M34" in quotes?

I removed the second instance. The reason for the first instance was because it was an unofficial designation.--Tomandjerry311 (need to talk?) 15:34, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"thirty-nine alone at Kasserine" is not a complete sentence, and should not be preceded by a semi-colon. It needs rephrasing. Done
"was captured there" – Where does "there" refer to?

It refers to Kasserine.--Tomandjerry311 (need to talk?) 15:37, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"to replace vehicles destroyed by Allied aircraft" – Rebuilt or re-purposed?

"...and rebuilt as an equipment and troop carrier to replace vehicles destroyed by Allied aircraft."--Tomandjerry311 (need to talk?) 23:29, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I also made some edits to the article itself where I thought the changes uncontroversial. Please check to make sure they are sensible. Hpesoj00

(talk) 10:06, 25 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Iazyges

"While conceived as an anti-aircraft weapon, its 37 mm gun was often used as an infantry support weapon during the latter stages of World War II." Perhaps later instead of latter, and by which units and divisions specifically? All of them? Done
"adding a coaxially mounted" Perhaps an short explanation on what that is for the inexperienced?
"and had a wheelbase of 135.5 inches (3.44 m)." Perhaps another explanation?
"(95 kW) 6-cylinder gasoline engine gave the M15 a power-to-weight ratio of 15.8 horsepower per ton" Perfect spot to say how many tons it weighs.
"A United States Army Armored Force requirement for a mobile anti-aircraft gun to support the coming North African Campaign resulted in the T28 project being revived soon after its cancellation" How soon?
"all of which had an unprotected mount for the gun combination and crew." In what way? No turret? could be elaborated upon. Done
"this mount placed on the M3 chassis, which resulted in its replacement with the M54 mount" Short explanation of what the difference is maybe?
"and added a M6 sighting system.[8][14]" Again a short explanation maybe.
"T28E1s were used in Italy until the end of the war.[20]" End of the war in italy or end of the war with germany or end of the war with japan? needs elaboration. *"Each US Army armored division was allocated an anti-aircraft artillery (AAA) company equipped with eight M15 CGMCs and eight M45 Quadmount-equipped M16 MGMCs." Perhaps a "Consisting of 80-250 men" should be added after the ""Each US Army armored division was allocated an anti-aircraft artillery (AAA) company " Part. End of constructive criticism. Iazyges (talk) 03:54, 10 August 2016 (UTC) @Tomandjerry311:[reply]