Wikipedia:Peer review/Matsudaira clan/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like reactions on its current status and views on how it can be improved.
Thanks, Tadakuni (talk) 04:05, 29 September 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- Biggest problem I see is that the article needs more references, for example none of the three Sengoku period subsections has a ref, nor does the whole Key Genealogies section. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
- Key Genealogies does not follow WP:HEAD, should be Key genealogies
- There are some short (one or two sentence) paragraphs that break up the flow of the article - could these be combined with others or expanded?
- Key Genealogies is very listy - could it be split into a separate list article?
- Or provide context for the reader on the Key Genealogies - who are these people? I know they are wikilinked in most cases, but a phrase or sentence on some of the more notable would help. See WP:PCR
- Nice images and refs seem OK.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 12:43, 5 October 2008 (UTC)