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Matthew Charlton

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I've listed this article for peer review because I have lifted it to GA status and would like to raise it to A or FA status.

Thanks, Littleteddy (roar!) 12:24, 10 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Hey, nice article. Some comments which may help elevate it toward A/FA status.

I think WP:LEAD would recommend around three paragraphs in the lead. I don't particularly like single sentence paragraphs, like the opening sentence of the lead, so consider merging the five paras you have there now into three.
Link Victoria in the lead.
"in getting Australia to adopt " reads a little clumsily to me...
Personal thing, but I would split Lambton, New South Wales into Lambton, New South Wales and add (NSW) afterwards so the acronym is well understood by the non-Australian readers.
You've linked the Australian Labor Party twice in the lead, no need for that.
I think the article, in general, is too segmented by the section headings. The sections themselves are relatively short so could be merged (with appropriate renaming of section headings).
Don't think you need the Australian Labor Party as a See also as well!

I think for A-class you'll need to sort out the above but also expand the article a bit. I hope my comments have helped a bit. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:02, 17 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]