Wikipedia:Peer review/Music of the Final Fantasy series/archive1
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I put this article through a pretty strenuous GA nom a while back, and I want to try to polish it up and send it to FAC. Any suggestions or problems with the article will be very much appreciated. --PresN 16:07, 23 July 2009 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: This appears to be in excellent shape. I had to work hard to find much to say, but here are a few observations and suggestions.
Heads and subheads
- MOS:HEAD says in part, "Section names should preferably be unique within a page; this applies even for the names of subsections." For this reason, I would suggest eliminating the words "Final Fantasy" from all of the heads and subheads. With most, this should be easy. For example, you could simply shorten "Final Fantasy X-2" to "X-2". Others will take a bit more thought.
Themes
- "It has been described as being 'as recognizable in gaming circles as the Super Mario Bros. theme or Sonic the Hedgehog's title screen pop." - The quotation marks showing the end of the quote in this sentence seem to be missing.
1987–1994: Famicom era
- "Aside from informing him of the specific technical limitations of the Famicom system, the game was released in 1987." - Dangling modifier. The game didn't inform him.
- "The soundtrack included that first attempt in the Final Fantasy series... " - "the" rather than "that"?
- "The first actual vocals in a song would appear in Final Fantasy VII." - Straight past, "appeared"?
Chocobo series
- "Only some of the games have received separate soundtrack releases." - Would "have led to" be better than "received"?
Merchandise
- "The majority of Final Fantasy games, including all of the main series games, have received a soundtrack album release." - "have led to"?
References
- MOS:ALLCAPS says in part, "Reduce newspaper headlines and other titles from all caps to title case: Replace "WAR BEGINS TODAY" with "War Begins Today"." For this reason, citations like #28 should be changed to title case.
General
- The dabfinder tool that lives here finds three links that go to disambiguation pages rather than to the intended target.
I hope these few suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 03:23, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for the comments! It's a great help. --PresN 16:17, 30 July 2009 (UTC)