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Nurture (album)

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Hey there! I'm planning to bring this article to GAN in the near future, so I'd really appreciate some feedback before that. I've worked on this article only minimally before, so feel free to call out even the most basic fixes. Thanks! —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 04:09, 31 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks to everyone for their comments; I believe I've addressed everything! I'm going to close this PR now due to inactivity, and will be nominating the article at GAN. (Also pinging article co-author Twotwice.) —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 06:34, 16 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Skyshifter

Nice, I'm also a Porter Robinson fan. I think the article can still be expanded considerably though. The article lacks a Composition section talking about the album's genre/musical style. It also doesn't really talk about the production of the album specifically, it only mentions a few information regarding background and the album's title and cover art. Looking at the refideas on the talk page, there are a good amount of sources that could be used to expand the article, especially the interviews. In the Reception section, there are sources used in the list of reviews that aren't cited in prose. Skyshifter ^talk 12:54, 31 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Long time no see, Skyshifter! (: I'm actually drafting up a "Themes" section right now, which I'll incorporate into the article as you suggested in a little bit.

Composition/Themes: Done —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 14:39, 11 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Reception: Done —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 06:33, 16 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments! —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 13:22, 31 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Small recommendation

Hi! Just a small recommendation after scanning the article: it seems redundant to have both "Reception" and "Critical response" as a heading/subheading. I would chose one and remove the subheading; otherwise, nice work! Uri24 (talk) 15:48, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Uri24: Thanks for the comment! I'm currently thinking of another subsection about audience responses, which would justify the distinction with critical responses. If that doesn't work out, though, I think I'll implement your suggestion. —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 16:04, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Done —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 10:59, 2 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Z1720

Comments after a quick skim:

The last two bullet points in "Notes" need citations

Not done; those points are sourced from the album's liner notes — I've moved them up to the top of the list so that will hopefully be more obvious. —TS

The "Critical response" section falls into the "X said Y" pattern, with small paragraphs for each review. I suggest reading WP:RECEPTION to improve upon the prose of this section.

Done, as above. —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 06:33, 16 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"The music video of the song was released on February 10, 2021." Needs a citation

Done —TS

The lede is quite short and doesn't include much information the background, album title and artwork or live performances. I suggest expanding it out.

Done —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 01:43, 16 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Each single released from the album does not need its own paragraph. Merge some of these together.

Section removed —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 16:40, 17 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 00:19, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks once again for your comments, Z1720! :) I'm on a semi-wikibreak this week, but I'll get around to implementing your suggestions once I'm back home. —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 17:38, 28 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Done with the GAN I was working on and can devote more attention to this article. Responded to your comments in line. —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 10:52, 2 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]