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Parliament of Australia

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I've listed this article for peer review because I have made substantial edits and expansions to this page over the last few months and I would like some feedback on how the article is going and how it can be even better!

Thanks, Superegz (talk) 08:34, 23 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from J947

I'll review this. J 947^{^{^(c)}} 02:05, 21 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

There should be no citations in the lead as per WP:CITELEAD.

Infobox

I've removed a few spaces.

It is very long. You should shorten it by at least a third.

First paragraph

I've added the serial comma and removed a space.

WP:OVERLINK should be followed for the 'Australia' link.

This sentence: The combination of two elected Houses, in which the members of the Senate represent the six States and the two self-governing Territories while the members of the House represent electoral divisions according to population, is modelled on the United States Congress., is rather long and should be split up.

Second paragraph

The upper house, the Senate, consists of 76 members:, should use emdashes instead of commas surrounding 'the senate'.

History

The Commonwealth of Australia came into being on 1 January 1901. Any reason why? It just seems too much of a coincidence...

After the official opening, from 1901 to 1927,. An emdash should be used.

Old Parliament House

There shouldn't be links in headings.

First paragraph

Again, emdashes.

And, again. :)

Second paragraph

was commenced on 28 August 1923[12] and completed in early 1927. Comma.

@Superegz: Ping for you. J 947^{^{^(c)}} 19:26, 25 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@J947: Thanks, I will have a look at this later when I am free. Superegz (talk) 23:47, 25 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]