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Pimpin' (song)

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because although this is an article I have only just created, I feel it is reasonably in depth considering the coverage the song received. I acknowledge that the article may not be of particularly high standard currently, and at the moment it is not particularly long, but I feel with assistance I can raise the standard considerably - possibly even to GA.

Thanks, I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 21:48, 11 November 2011 (UTC)

Comments from Michael Jester

Here are some small things that I noticed:

• Use {{'"}} to separate the apostrophe and quotation mark in "Pimpin'"
• In the lead, "considerable rotation" may be seen as POV by some users. Personally, I don't think it is, but I've seen problems with it in the past. Just a heads up.
• Under Critical reception:
  • What makes RapReviews.com a reliable source?
  • In the sentence "Allmusic writer David Jeffries named "Pimpin" as one [...]", the song should have an apostrophe, according to the article. I noticed you have done this a couple times.
• The word "whilst" have been called archaic by some users. Just another heads up on it.

(How's this: "refers to how other men simply chase their pleasures.")

• Stylus magazine should be in italics.
• I think you can lose the colon in "Recorded at: Encore Studios, California."
• What makes SOHH a reliable source?
• In ref 8, the - should be replaced with a –
• For ref 10, consider using {{singlechart}}

Good work on the article so far, Rufus. I hope my review was helpful, and if you have any questions, contact me on my talk page.
—Michael Jester (talk) 01:18, 14 November 2011 (UTC)