Wikipedia:Peer review/Pokémate/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to better learn to professionally write an article and make sure that my style of writing is appropriate for Wikipedia, and any other ways this article can be improved.
Thanks, Kuro Woof 00:38, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your work here. There are many things to learn on Wikipedia and here are some suggestions and links to improve the article:
- All the guidelines for Wikipedia articles are in the Manual of Style - see WP:MOS
- It is often useful to have a model article to follow as an example. I see that Pokémon Diamond and Pearl is a Good Article, which means it meets farily strict criteria and has been reviewed for quality. It seems like it would be a useful model.
- The name of the article should be in bold and as early as possible in the first sentence of the lead. See WP:LEAD
- The lead should also summarize the rest of the article and not just be an introduction. Nothing should be only in the lead, it should also be repeated in the article text. Again WP:LEAD
- Is it "Pokémate" (article title) or "PokéMate" (first word in article)? Be consistent (and move the article or make redirects as needed - ask if you need help on how to do this)
- The game (?) seems to be only available in Japan, but the article does not say this. Provide context for the reader - WP:PCR
- Avoid second person (you) in writing
- References are usually easier with {{cite web}}
- Internet references should have url, title, publisher, autor if known, and date accessed (cite web does all this). See WP:CITE
- Also make sure references are reliable sources - see WP:RS
- The article should not be an instruction manual or description of how to play / operate the game, but a description of it from reliable third-party sources. See WP:NOT
Hope this helps, keep up the good work and keep improving the article and encyclopedia, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 04:02, 24 April 2008 (UTC)