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—Preceding unsigned comment added by Ruhrfisch (talkcontribs) 03:17, 2 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I've listed this article for peer review because I am rarely caught off guard by a GA fail. This one puzzles me, so I would appreciate some editorial advice.

Thanks, TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 14:48, 9 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: It's interesting to read how computers have affected poker playing. I have no direct experience with this software, but I can make a few suggestions about prose and Manual of Style issues.

Images

  • The last image, at least on my computer monitor, overlaps two sections. MOS:IMAGES says "Images should be inside the section they belong to... ". It might be a case of one too many images.

Lead

  • "PokerTracker is the name of a poker tool software company as well as the base name of several versions of its software programs." - "computer programs" rather than "software programs" to avoid repetition of "software"?
  • "PokerTracker software is a popular brand of poker tracking and analysis software." - Delete the whole sentence because it essentially repeats the first sentence?
  • "The software has several facets that allow the user to monitor each poker session profit/loss, hands played, time played, and table style." - Replace "has several facets that allow" with one word, "allows"? Change "poker session" to "poker session's"?
  • "It also is able to calculate and graph various statistics... " - Tighten to "It calculates and graphs statistics... "?
  • "... each poker session profit/loss, hands played, time played, and table style. It also is able to calculate and graph various statistics such as hands/hour, dollars/hand, dollars/hour, cumulative profit/loss, and individual game profit/loss." - The use of the front slash is confusing because in the first instance it means "and", while in the other instances it stands for "per". Suggestion: replace each instance of the front slash with the word it stands for. Ditto for other places in the article that use the front slash.

Products

Summary

I hope these few comments prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 00:49, 19 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]