Wikipedia:Peer review/Poquita Ropa/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because i has been copyedited, reached GA status and i think i will be nominating it for FA after the PR is done and other issues are fixed.
Thanks, —Hahc21 05:19, 1 August 2012 (UTC)
- I'll do this one. PS: If I may get interrupted in real life: so if I forget about this, please notify me on my Talk page! --Noleander (talk) 15:12, 16 August 2012 (UTC)
Comments from Noleander
- Recording date in infobox: says "2009-10" -- is that October 2009? or two years? If two years, that is rather vague: can you supply the start & end months, if available?
- Wording: "The other two singles released were ..." - Delete word "released".
- Plainer: "Arjona produced an eponymous film which was broadcast .." - Most readers won't know what eponymous means: use plainer words.
- Film detail: "On 12 February 2011, HBO premiered the film Poquita Ropa – Una .." - Can you add words here telling the reader if the film is a fictional story with the musician supported by actors? Or a fictional story featuring musicians only? Or is it mostly a non-fiction documentary-style film of them simply performing the pieces?
- Wording: "Arjona also said that ..." - The word "also" is not quite right here. Rarely need the word "also" in any article.
- When? - "A deluxe edition was released .." - Prior sentences include dates, so this event should also have a date.
- Pic from film? - The article would be much better with a still photo (screenshot) from the film. That is copyrighted, of course, so instructions at WP:NFCI have to be followed.
- Wording: "broadcasted" -> "broadcast" (past tense same as present)
- English translation: " Arjona commented, "Although many believe is a threshed topic, .." - word "threshed" is not right. Perhaps "exhausted" or "drained" or "worn out" or "overused"?
- "Puente" is one of Arjona's least successful lead singles. .." - was that song 8 minutes? That is rather long for a song on the radio, no? Was there a shorter version for the radio? If not, did the length contribute to the ranking?
- That is all for now. I suggest that you implement the above suggestions, then take it to WP:FAC and see how it goes. There are very strict standards there, and I'm sure you'll get lots more feedback at that point. The good news is that the article is very focused, with relatively few sources, so that makes it very feasible to get to FAC status. Good luck!
End Noleander comments. --Noleander (talk) 15:12, 16 August 2012 (UTC)