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I recently had this article assessed to see whether it fit a higher Class than Start-Class. The comments there are immensely helpful, but I am the only one working on this article at the moment, and would like some input on a number of things:
- I've been told the tone of the article is too informal. Any suggestions for what to cut?
- The discography needs to be fleshed-out. Problem is, their singles discography is sparsely-verifiable at best as I've only been able to ascertain that a few of their songs have even been released as singles. Any suggestions, perhaps, for sources I can use to improve this? (Also, just as a note to myself, I should integrate single release dates into the history section as much as possible once I have them.)
- I was also told to "find cites to talk about their influences". Nothing pertaining to their influences is included if it's not cited; am I perhaps missing something here?
- When typing on a keyboard as opposed to writing by hand, I tend to lose track of what I'm trying to say and in an effort to recapture my original point I go way overboard and make things way longer they should be. Anything I can do to boil the article down a bit further?
- They are a Guitar Hero band, as in they did have a song featured in the series and it had such an impact on their history as a band that it warrants mentioning and detail. But I thought the way I had it before was just fine; maybe at the time the article was reviewed it did not have much in the way of their Guitar Hero fame, but as the article stands now, does this bit need to be improved in any way?
That's all that comes to mind, but please know that I am interested in whatever feedback you have to offer (directly pertaining to my questions listed above or otherwise). So if you see anything wrong with the article, please tell me.
Also, I've been using Nirvana (band) as a guide since that is a featured article (and Nirvana are one of my favorite bands). All layout features are designed to emulate those of that article (in case anyone was wondering). And yes, I am aware that a "reception" section is missing; perhaps I could migrate some stuff from the history part of the article down to it?
Thanks in advance for whatever assistance you can provide, LazyBastardGuy 19:38, 29 September 2013 (UTC)