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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to nominate it as a featured article. Please review 'Campus' and 'Traditions and legends' sections in particular. Any kinds of comments and contributions are welcome! :)

Thanks, Jainrajat11 (talk) 17:51, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Frankly, this article is grossly unreferenced (I am not trying to be insulting, but that is my opinion). Entire sections are unsourced. I suggest that referencing this article be your top priority.
Legends and Miscellany are like WP:TRIVIA sections. These are discouraged. Perhaps you could make separate articles for the legends and integrate the miscellaneous info into the different sections.
The prose is not bad at all; but just so you have something else to work on here is an example of a sentence that could be improved: "Contestants would run laps around the courtyard of Cary in the nude on one of the coldest nights of the year, and the one that could last the longest would be declared the winner" --> "Contestants ran laps around the courtyard of Cary nude on one of the coldest nights of the year; the person that endured the cold the longest was declared the winner."
A way to improve the campus section is that for each landmark of the campus; combine the one sentence paragraphs to make larger, flowing paragraphs. It's not that hard to do; just eliminate the space between the sentences, add transition words or phrases, and eliminate the redundant information.
When working on the article, look at a FA class university article as a model, such as Georgetown University

I hope my comments helped. If you have a question or want me to go deeper into something, please feel free to contact me at my talk page. Dabomb87 (talk) 01:54, 8 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]