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Rafael Carrera

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I've listed this article for peer review because I consider it already contains enough information to be considered as a Good Article. It's style needs some improvement, as I am not a native English speaker and edits from top reviewers will be welcomed.

Thanks, Nerdoguate (talk) 03:10, 26 January 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Tim riley

• As discussed on your talk page, I've given the prose a once-over, which please check carefully to ensure I haven't distorted your meaning at any point. It would be no bad thing if other editors would look in and improve on my efforts.
• WP:OVERLINK: you need to go through the text removing all duplicate links. I've taken out a few while copy-editing, but there are a great many left. There is a useful tool here which you can use to highlight duplicates.
• There are a few statements that lack citations: in particular, it is unwise to end a paragraph without a citation.

I'll watch this review, and return to it once other editors have added their comments. Tim riley talk 12:13, 31 January 2015 (UTC)

Comments from SchroCat

A few points for you to mull over...

1. This needs some additional citations: rule of thumb is that each paragraph should have at least one, if not more – that includes the Notes section, which will mean you can get rid of the use of op.cit, which is frowned upon.
2. There's a lot of overlinking (Catholic Church in the lead; Guatemala City is linked five times – and the first mention isn't one of them)

Removed the extra links.

1. You'll need to check some of the pages in the refs. When it is multiple pages it should be pp=22–23, rather than p=22–23

Fixed

1. Three of the refs—15, 18, 20—have odd looking dates in there (15.^ Jump up to: a b c d Hernández de León 1959, p. April 20.), etc

Added correct page number.

1. You should probably include ISBNs for the refs

Added all the ISBNs that I could find.

1. There are five sources in the bibliography that are not in use (Martínez Peláez x 2, Montúfar, Rosa and Stephens): you should drop them into the Further reading section

Added the proper links. Thanks for the help!--Nerdoguate (talk) 16:37, 5 February 2015 (UTC)

I hope these help! Cheers – SchroCat (talk) 22:05, 4 February 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Oscar-Hap

A couple things...

1. A few paragraphs are quite long, and would be 'polite' to try to divide them in 2-3 paragraphs. Most dyslexics have difficulties with that, or are even unable to read those paragraphs completely. Older people that gradually lose vision have the same problems. It's an easy change and you'll let everyone enjoy all of the text -and won't panic some of us with some huge box of text. Concretely:
   • On Battles with Morazán, first paragraph.
   • On Morazán Second Invasion of Guatemala, first & second paragraph.
2. The title 'Concordat of 1854', does not align to left on my screen (I'm using 1600x900, I guess it happens on bigger resolutions too) due to the floating image (left side) of the coat of arms above it. The image causes the title to bleed to the right and appear unaligned. I think there was some way/markup to avoid floating boxes bleeding titles, but I can't remember right now...

I'll try to get some time and give it a deep reading. Oscar-HaP (talk) 19:35, 12 February 2015 (UTC)