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Release the Stars

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to put the article through the Featured Articles process. Before doing so, I'd like feedback to improve the article--spelling, punctuation, grammar, content, context, etc. Any help would be appreciated.

Thanks so much! Another Believer _(Talk) 23:21, 14 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC.
- What makes the following reliable sources?
  - http://www.chartstats.com/index.php
  - http://www.newnownext.com/2007/04/index.html
- Note that a good number of references are to the site of the performer himself, which might be a concern at FAC from some reviewers. You need to make sure that nothing contentious is sourced there.

Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 23:33, 15 March 2009 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback. I was under the impression ChartStats was reliable, as it is listed here as a recommended, reliable resource for obtaining UK chart positions. NewNowNext.com is simply the official blog for the TV channel, Logo--for this article, it is simply to cite the airing of a television program on the network, so hopefully that will be acceptable. Should either reference be questioned during the FA process, I am sure replacements can be found. As for the numerous references to rufuswainwright.com, most of them are used throughout the Tour section, as his site offers a list of past concert dates and news entries about various events and contests associated with the musician. Thanks again! --Another Believer _(Talk) 05:04, 16 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Giants2008 - Though I'm not normally a music reviewer, I am an experienced FAC reviewer and can provide insights on the process. Here are my thoughts on the article:

The lead seems a shade short. Can the second paragraph be expanded to more than one sentence?

I added information about the awards he received for the album, since these were not mentioned previously.

According to the link-checker, reference 45 (from Billboard) is a dead link.

The Katie Hasty article? It is working fine for me...

This statement raises POV concerns: "For his "incredible take on what popular music means in today's world". Sounds like something that should be placed in the reception section, or attributed to the author at the very least.

Wainwright is the author. He said this of Tennant in an interview.

Release the Stars world tour: "and ending in NYC in mid-February 2008." Spell out New York City.

Done.

En dash for "November-December".

Done.

To avoid having a one-sentence paragraph, I recommend moving the third paragraph to the end of the first paragraph. It would be a natural fit there.

Done.

Critical reception: "mostly pertaining to its overly-lavish and decadent style." Hyphen shouldn't be used after -ly. Giants2008 (17-14) 02:48, 21 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Thanks so much for your time and assistance! --Another Believer _(Talk) 20:37, 21 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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