Wikipedia:Peer review/Ritual Fire Dance (de Falla)/archive1
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I think it could be rated as a C or B class article and would like others' opinions on whether it is.
Thanks, Pianoplonkers (talk) 15:51, 16 October 2009 (UTC)
I've reviewed the article, and made the following changes:
- Slightly improved image captions per WP:CAP
- Restructured sentences in the "Role in Ballet" section, and added a couple (lame-ish) wikilinks
- Reordered "Recordings" table in chronological order
The following issues still concern me:
- I don't think that references should be appended to section headings. Instead, try putting it after the table, or at the end of the paragraph that draws from that reference.
- The entire section on "Structure" seems...odd. If someone wants to know how the piano arrangement is structured, wouldn't they just look at the score? If the section is to be kept, at least try to avoid the "this, and then that, then that, and then this..." redundancy in sentences. Spice it up a little; make it more than a bland, sequential regurgitation of fact.
- Citations should use the {{citeweb}} template or something similar. Include more than just hyperlinks.
- The article has two tables, but very little prose. Is there anything else to be discussed on the topic? How did it become popular? What cultural significance/impact does it have?
What rating the article deserves, I don't rightly know. I think it is probably a little below the C threshold, but I leave it to those who are more familiar with the fine arts to decide that. ...but what do you think? ~B Fizz (talk) 04:38, 22 October 2009 (UTC)