Wikipedia:Peer review/Robert Falcon Scott/archive1
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because it is a complete revision of an article which had in my view ceased to be a proper biographical article, due to some highly partial editing. I would welcome views as to whether the POV tag should now be removed, and any other suggestions about improving the article.
Thanks, Brianboulton (talk) 00:59, 25 February 2008 (UTC)
- External links should be at the end, per Wikipedia:MoS#External_links.—RJH (talk) 21:46, 28 February 2008 (UTC)
- This has been done Brianboulton (talk) 23:38, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
- I have also made a number of alterations based on the semi-automated review. Brianboulton (talk) 15:13, 6 March 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments" Overall very well written, illustrated and referenced. Here are some nitpicks:
- Lead: Identify Tom Crean in the lead (Irish explorer Tom Crean?). Otherwise lead seems fine and flows nicely.
- Family background: From the testimony of his daughter Grace it appears... change to From the testimony of John's daughter Grace it appears... as "his" was unclear
- Discovery: Could you give the distance to the pole in miles / kilometres too at , and this ended at the modest latitude of 82°17’S.[20]?
- Terra Nova: Can you clarify / expand On March 17 Oates sacrificed himself? I assume it is some sort of "go one without me, I'll only slow you down" thing?
- Glorification of Scott: per the MOS, I think the title of this section would be better as just "Glorification" (omit repetiton of thesubject of the article's name). I also made a small edit to fix a reference that was broken - please check that this is OK.
- Several references either have a space after the punctuation and before the ref i.e. "end. [1]", or need a space after the ref and before the next sentence i.e. "end.[1]Start"
- Seems to be NPOV to me - reports current attitiudes from both sides. Perhaps ask woever put the POV tag on in the first place if the article is NPOV?
Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 01:34, 17 March 2008 (UTC)
- All these have been attended to, together with a few other refinements arising out of them Brianboulton (talk) 13:12, 17 March 2008 (UTC)