Wikipedia:Peer review/Royal Air Force/archive1

Royal Air Force

I have made a number of changes to this article over the past few months, as have a small number of others. I believe it is making progress towards a FAC, but feel a wider critical audience will help. What do you feel the article needs? Sc147 21:02, 20 Apr 2005 (UTC)

A very good start. However, there are several lists that could be separated out to other main articles (list of ranks, lists of aircraft, lists of famous RAF personnel). The history section is a bit short and quite choppy in places, and there are few images - how about adding some images of aircraft, RAF bases, war memorials, uniforms. -- ALoan (Talk) 10:59, 21 Apr 2005 (UTC)

Yep. The list are way to long - it is a policy that FA should not have long lists. Either transform those sections into paragraps or move the list to another supporting article. There is too much short - one, two sentence - paragraphs all over the article. Merge every second paragraph or expand. Remove external links from the main body, use Wikipedia:Footnotes. Format references according to Wikipedia:Cite Sources. See also is fairly large, consider incorportaing into text (and of course remove anything already mentioned in the main body). And 'see also' in main body should be somehow incorporated into the normal text flow or into {{main|Article name}} template. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus Talk 18:59, 21 Apr 2005 (UTC)

I've made an effort with the lists to try to incorporate them as text; the famous members section has been exported to it's own article. Just started looking through the history - really needs some attention. Sc147 00:25, 22 Apr 2005 (UTC)