Wikipedia:Peer review/Saskatchewan Highway 1/archive1

Saskatchewan Highway 1

I've listed this article for peer review because…work has been commencing on a number of Saskatchewan highway articles, and guidance is requested to seek good or even feature status to improve quality of articles on wikipedia in this genre. This article is one of high importance being a part of the Trans-Canada route.

Thanks,

SriMesh | talk 18:20, 30 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style. If you would find such a review helpful, please click here. Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 02:41, 5 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for this comment have addressed all the issues generated except the one about sub-sections, as I am not sure which section needs the sub-sections. Any other comments welcome also. SriMesh | talk 02:53, 8 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

- It has been fixed now - just reran the script and this did not come up again. From the other peer review, looks like tere were many more subsections describing its course that have been merged. Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 01:56, 22 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by User:GeeJo

Ok, let me preface this by saying that I've no knowledge on the subject itself, so I'm unable to comment on any factual niggles. This'll mostly be about MoS issues.

Origins: Minister of Energy, Mines and Resources (Canada) could do with a link.
Origins: You could do with briefly explaining why there was a need for a trans-Canada highway. You don't need a great amount of information (that's what Trans-Canada Highway is for), but a summary would be helpful.
Origins: What was the general consensus in the province about the project? Was it an issue discussed by the politicians and media?
Origins: Provinbcial => Provincial
Origins: If you can find any information on the subject, perhaps you should include a brief overview of the potential routes discussed, and why the chosen route was settled on. Was there much discussion with Alberta/Manitoba over the meeting locations?
Origins: Dominion government isn't a term used widely outside certain Commonwealth countries. Perhaps switch to national (if I interpreted the term correctly myself :) )
Origins/Speed Limits: Are all the quotation boxes necessary? They break up the text significantly and I'm not sure that some of them couldn't just be explained in prose with a citation leading to the full quotation.
Maintenance: The section is only one sentence long. Either it needs expanding or it can be absorbed into another section.
Maintenance: Who is responsible for overseeing the maintenance of the highway? Is it at a local, provincial, or national level? Where does the funding come from?
Maintenance: "a 4.6 paving project" I have no idea what this means.
Maintenance: Link Judy Bradley. Identify her as a provincial-level politician.
Speed Limits: Should be Speed limits
Speed Limits: "The highway is twinned east of Regina until Highway 617 east of Wolseley." - explain twinned.
Communities: Ok, this is where "figures overload" sets in. I'm not sure that all of these numbers are necessary or even relevant, and most seem to just be acting as filler. How do census figures on the towns inform readers on the highway itself? Do I really need to know about when the various post offices were established? Have a read through and take out bits that aren't germane to discussion on the highway. This may require a bit of reorganisation.
Swift Current to Moose Jaw: What is Local Improvement District (L.I.D.) #9? Why do you abbreviate it and then not use the abbreviation again (and usually periods aren't included in abbreviations)?
Swift Current to Moose Jaw: Valjean could support a post office between 1912 and 1968 - On the off-chance you really think that this belongs here: could it or did it?
Moose Jaw to Regina: <ref="Large"/> should be <ref name="Large"/>
Moose Jaw to Regina: You've not used the abbreviation RM before, and the link to Pense No. 160, Saskatchewan doesn't make it immediately obvious what it stands for.
Regina to Manitoba: This reads as a slightly prosified list. It needs a lot of work.
Regina to Manitoba: another <ref="Large"> (and "Solonyka, Ed & Solonyka". The poor person's name is Solonyka Solonyka? :) )
Regina to Manitoba: Trans Canada highway => Trans-Canada Highway
Geophysical features: The section is one giant indigestible block of text. Break it up.
Books: Is this a bibliography or further reading? Either way, why only one entry? If there aren't more, just drop the section.
External links: Identify the sites being linked to. Perhaps (use your judgement) explain why I'd want to click on them.
Are there any perennial issues brought up by the media with regards to the highway? I ask this because in the UK, debates over tolls and maintenance crop up every now and then. Even if it's only at the national level, you might be able to find a few comments at the provincial level. If there aren't any debates, fair enough.
The could do with a bit of a copyedit, as word choices seem a bit clumsy at times (finally finishes and the like). I'm not really the person to ask about fixing this, but there're a few editors who specialise in this type of thing.
There isn't a single image of the highway itself in the article. Perhaps try asking at Wikiproject Canada etc for a snap or two of the road. Since the Saskatchewan section was completed in 1957, you *might* be able to get hold of some expired Crown Copyright images ({{PD-Canada}}) of either the construction or of the first year of use. But then again, maybe not.