Wikipedia:Peer review/Secret of Evermore/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because it has been in existence for a long time and only recently been expanded properly from Start-class to B-class. With improvements and suggestions from editors, I believe that with the article's information from numerous paper and online references, it has the potential to be a Good article along with the numerous good and featured topics of WikiProject Square Enix.
Thanks, Hibana 20:13, 29 June 2008 (UTC)
- Giggy comments
- I don't really like the first paragraph of the lead. Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Newsletter/20080409 is useful for lead organisation... basically you should mention a release date, and specifically saying that Square developed it would be good.
- "the player will need to switch between the boy and the dog in order to solve various puzzles." - sounds gameguide-ish, but it's info that should be there... can you reword it?
- "Secret of Evermore takes many of its interface and gameplay aspects from Secret of Mana" - if that was a prequel, then say so.
- Damn that's quite a few screenshots... fair use issues?
- "Despite this controversy, Secret of Evermore received fairly good reviews" - I don't see how this "controversy" (is it?) would lead to bad reviews...
- You may wish to use Template:VG Reviews.
- Magazines/newspapers need to be in italics everywhere (see MOS:ITALICS).
Generally looks good - probably close to GA standards. Still needs some work before FA. —Giggy 05:20, 4 July 2008 (UTC)