Wikipedia:Peer review/Sherry Thomas/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because it's a new article and I want to get an idea for general improvement and best practices so I can then replicate it to other author bios.
Thanks, plange (talk) 01:21, 2 June 2015 (UTC)
Comments from Cas Liber
[edit]- Thomas's family was from southern China but lived in northern China, where she was born - use localities/regions - will avoid repetitive use of "China" here and in sentences following
- Add what language she spoke growing up.
- Thanks! Unfortunately that's as specific as she got in that source, but I'll keep looking to see if another mentions either of these. Thanks! plange (talk) 12:33, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
Comments from Ugog Nizdast
[edit]- A good reference should be J K Rowling (it is a Featured article) regarding formatting and structure.
- Ref 26, 27, 28, 29 are bare urls. Format them.
- This is a bio page, so it should primarily contain such material. I'm seeing sections for each of her work's reception, this might count as a COATRACK. The books themselves can have their own article if they pass NBOOK but otherwise this may need trimming. Also, they will need to be merged into the Writing career section. If the book article exists, the content should be summarised here.
- The lead section has three quotes which are unattributed. Either summarise them in your own words or mention who is saying it, see ATTRIBUTEPOV. ‑Ugog Nizdast (talk) 11:24, 16 June 2015 (UTC)
- Thank you for your feedback--I've fleshed out the refs (had added those on my tablet and forgot to come back on my desktop to fill them out); made separate articles for 2 books and moved rest to writing career (will keep working on this to either make separate articles or move some of this to general discussion about themes and writing style); attributed quotes in lead. plange (talk) 03:53, 17 June 2015 (UTC)