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Siddharth Shetty

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I would like to improve the content and quality of the article. In spite of making a number of edits, this article has been flagged with issues - I really don't know why. Could you suggest the necessary changed, and guide me accordingly.

Thanks, RohansoodH22 (talk) 16:50, 18 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

EdwardH comments

I can't find any licensing information on the picture of Siddharth. Apparently it can be used providing it is properly attributed, but it doesn't say that on the source article.
Was "found" meant to be used instead of "scale" in "Siddharth took a gap year ... to scale Fundlined"?
Use "he" instead of repeatedly saying "Siddharth".
In the business career section, his age is mentioned three times. The first one is all that is needed to provide context.
The three references at the bottom should be replaced with citations.
Use spaced en dashes (–) instead of spaced hyphens (-). See MOS:DASH for full details.
References are missing the author's name and the date. The author's name should be provided last name first.
Currently the Business career and Events sections are just lists of what has happened to him. This makes for tedious prose, so consider changing it to a summary or newspaper style.

Don't be disheartened by the list, though; the article is well-sourced and well-written. I hope you continue to contribute Wikipedia. EdwardH (talk) 20:42, 2 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]