Wikipedia:Peer review/Source transformation/archive1
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Thanks, Perevodchik (talk) 18:12, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article that needs some cleanup work to better follow the Manual of Style. Here are some suggestions for improvement:
- The lead needs to follow WP:LEAD, specifically the name of the article should be bold and as early as possible in the first sentence.
- Perhaps the first sentence could be something like: Source transformation is a process to find a solution to a complex electrical circuit which simplifies the circuit by transforming a voltage into a current source, and vice versa.[1]
- The lead should also summarize the whole article, the example is not mentioned now.
- The article is fairly technical, try to explain jargon clearly - see WP:JARGON
- Also try to provide context for the reader - perhaps explain the theorems and Ohm's Law briefly - see WP:PCR
- Headers should not repeat the title of the article, so "Example of a Source Transformation" should just be "Example" or perhaps "Sample calculation"
- The figure would be clearer if the letter Z were oriented the same way for both parts of the figure - looks like an N in the right side
- I would also explain the symbols in the figure for the uninitiated
- In the example avoid second person (you)
Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 14:58, 5 April 2008 (UTC)