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Spirited Away

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This project took about a few years in the making (with some breaks due to real-life situations) and the first peer review was withdrawn because of that Richard Wagner PR for FA. Now, I've listed this article for peer review again because I am planning to take the article to FAC and would appreciate comments to improve it further.

Thanks, Lord Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 01:37, 31 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The plot section's awfully long—there's a hidden comment that it should be between 400 and 700 words long. It's 855. Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 02:39, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Done Lord Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 05:49, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Has the literature been re-consulted since the last review? I note that FAC requires a "thorough and representative survey of the relevant literature". The French article (promoted to FA in early 2016) seems much more comprehensive than this article at present, and seems to have some English-language sources that this article does not, such as "Heart of Japaneseness". --211.30.17.74 (talk) 22:43, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Not yet, as I was busy with other things actually. Lord Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 13:41, 4 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. The citation style varies widely in the article, and images do not have Wikipedia:Alternative text for images. What makes the HSC source a reliable source? At present, the article needs more depth - for example, there is no section on the music album associated with Spirited Away, although it has apparently attracted some critical attention in the British Film Institute's film classics entry on Spirited Away. --211.30.17.74 (talk) 08:31, 5 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I didn't realize that a music section should be included. I plan to include it when I get the chance. Lord Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 19:30, 17 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Can you read the French article? --211.30.17.74 (talk) 05:29, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

One comment: why is there a picture of a place that has been proven not to have been an inspiration for the film? Perhaps it deserves a brief mention in the prose if this is a common misconception, but showing an image of something that has nothing to do with the film seems inappropriate to say the least. Hpesoj00 (talk) 20:09, 20 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Sjones23:Comments by Tintor2 (talk) 16:28, 26 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Yo! First of all the lead uses some references which tend to be against WP:Lead (although 8, 9, 10 seem important). The lead's last paragraph has a small sentence (bare url) which should be removed or moved to reception.

Can the voice cast be turned into a prose to reduce unnecessary weight like "Chihiro Ogino (荻野千尋 Ogino Chihiro?)/Sen (千?) Rumi Hiiragi Daveigh Chase." It could be explained with who are they or any development information from the cast like the ones from Final Fantasy VII: Advent Children

In Development, what is the Dōgo Onsen? Could a brief explanation be added and should be it written with italics since it's not an English word?

English adaptation lacks a citation.

Themes have some small paragraphs. I would recommend to combining them.

Reference 69 lacks formatting

That's all I could find. If you have free time I would like if you could comment on my own peer review. Good luck with this article.