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Star Trek

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This article has undergone huge changes of late, and after staring at it for several days, I believe it needs a new set of eyes to determine what else is needed to promote this article to Featured status. Thank you for any imput, Newnam^(talk) 21:23, 26 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

It looks good. I have a few, mostly nit-picking comments that I hope are of some use:

Overall what the page is missing is a section on the Star Trek universe that briefly covers the major races, the location and volume of the Federation space, and the major technologies. I don't think it would need to be long; just enough to get the reader's feet wet (and give a link to a main article).
Where the starfleet is mentioned in the introduction, it should also explain the purpose of this organization for those who may not be familiar with the Star Trek universe.
The sentence "Issues depicted in the various series, such as imperialism, class warfare, racism, human rights, and the role of technology" appears incomplete.
The sentence "Altogether, the six series comprise a total of 726 episodes or thirty seasons or 735 professional hours or 550.75 literal hours[3] of programming" is a little awkward and could use a re-write. For example, "Altogether, the six series spanned thirty seasons over a total of thirty seasons. The combined programming covers 550.75 hours, and required 735 professional hours to produce." (Did I correctly interpret "professional hours" there?)

Probably not - one is about 75% of the other, which looks to me like the ratio between program content time and the time taken to show the episodes with advertising breaks. A "professional hour" would therefore be the one-hour time period in which a 42-minute episode is screened (and yes, that is not 75%, but advertising content standards have changed). Darcyj 12:01, 30 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

When is the sentence that begins "The original series currently airs on G4..." current? Likewise for the sentence: "The series currently airs on Sky One and BBC Two..."
In the DSN section, the sentence that beings "The show chronicles the events..." runs on a tad. Could that be split into two smaller sentences right about the location of the "which"?
The Voyager section mentions the "Delta quadrant". This Star Trek-specific concept should be explained somewhere at or before its introduction.
The "Use of the name 'Star Trek'" section needs a reference or two.
Reference [34] should be moved after the period.
The "Wagon Train to the stars" reference could use a brief explanation in the text, in addition to the link.
A couple of the footnotes consist of bare URLs. Please enhance these to explain where the reader is heading. (A {{cite web}} template is suggested.)
The folks in FAC like to see a reference or two in the introduction.

Um, what sort of reference exactly? There are numerous cross-links in the introduction. Do you mean footnote-type external references? Darcyj 12:03, 30 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! — RJH (talk) 14:56, 20 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]