Wikipedia:Peer review/Superman Returns/archive1
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Hi, any suggestions that could get this to FA level would be much appreciated. Thanks. Versitywater 00:49, 15 July 2006 (UTC)
- Ok, then:
- Cast. It's no good. It just won't do. See Richard III (1955 film), or Casablanca (film) for ideas on how to make it not suck.
- Trivia. FA no likey Trivia. Intergrate the most interesting and important parts of the Trivia section into the body of the article, and to hell with the rest.
- Plot. Intergrate the sub-plot section into the the main plot. If every film article had a seperate section for each sub-plot, well, the Revenge of the Sith article would be a mess.
- Trailers and TV spots. Don't list and provide links to every single goddamned one. Just write a summary about "Promotion" or "Release". Get rid of this section
- Connections to SII. Prosify. Lists are bad for FA
- Allegories and Allusions (specific to other lore). Rename to Cultural Allusions, and prosify.
- Back-References. What is this? Get it out of here!
- Spin offs. No. Get rid of this, maybe have seperate sections on Video game, novel, ect, with each section providing a link to the respective main article
Get right onto the things I've suggested, get it looking more like Revenge of the Sith (see that in terms of how to structure the article), Richard III (1955 film) (my own FA), or, in my opinion, the best Film article around, Casablanca (film). Once you've done that, well, you might have an FA on your hands. The hard part (the citing) has been done, so in reality, you're on easy street. ....(Complain)(Let us to it pell-mell) 10:02, 17 July 2006 (UTC)
- I agree with alot of what the above user said, but I have some suggestions:
- Is it standard to have an All Movie Guide profile link in the infobox?
- Make sure there are no lone lines/short stub-like paragraphs, e.g the final line of the plot.
- Sub-plot is okay to keep, though turn it into paragraphs, and make it less speculative.
- Cast, see V for Vendetta, this is a must.
- Production needs more references, I would merge Marlon Brando's role into the cast description, once you model the section after other FAs.
- Deleted scenes needs to be expanded and referenced.
- Trailers and TV spots is no good, create a section on promotion or something. Get rid of as many ex.links in the text as possible.
- Reactions is not very good. See other FAs.
- Box office results needs tyo be expanded or moved into a cleaned up Reactions.
- Merge IMAX 3D release into my proposed Promotion/Release section.
- Connections to Superman and Superman II must be turned into paragraphs, and have a few references.
- Same goes for Allegories and Allusions (specific to other lore).
- Trivia, removeentirely, and grab what is actually useful content, merge it into appropriate sections.
- Other back-references, merge into Ref. to Sup. I and II (change title to ref. to other Sup. media?)
- Change the title of Spin-offs, though keep them together, as if you seperate them, they will all be too short. No dot points. Perhaps merge Documentary into here as well, or more appropriately, into Promotion/Release.
- Take ? out of Sequel? title. Expand andf reference. Cvene64 04:49, 18 July 2006 (UTC)
- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 15:39, 21 July 2006 (UTC)