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The Get Up Kids

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I am requesting a peer review for this article as a first step to nominating it for Featured Article status. It recently became a Good Article, and I am looking for suggestions for what I should improve before nominating it for FA.

Thanks, Rwiggum (^Talk/_Contrib) 19:12, 14 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: I am trying to figure out if I know any songs by this band - article is decent but needs some work before FAC. Here are some suggestions for improvement with an eye towards FAC.

Several places need references - this is a must fix before FAC. For example, the last paragraph of the Influence section or all but one sentence of the After breakup (2005-2008) section needs refs. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
Current ref 25 is a dead link.
Make sure the refs used meet WP:RS
My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way , so the lead probably needs to be expanded a bit.
A near professional level of language is the hardest FAC criterion for most articles to meet and this could stand some polishing of the prose too. For example, there are a fair number of places that seem needlessly wordy and/or repeat words, such as The album would be the first ~~album to be~~ recorded in Black Lodge Studios, ~~the recording studio~~ in Eudora, Kansas, [which was] renovated and owned by The Get Up Kids and producer Ed Rose. The Black Lodge Studios article says the Pope brothers and Rose own the studio (not the band and Rose). Or this In March 2004, the band released their fourth and ~~what would be their~~ final studio album, Guilt Show, produced by Ed Rose.
Watch overlinking - Ed Rose is linked five times in the article (once for the studio) - see WP:OVERLINK
The caption The Uptown Theater marquee on the night of the final Get Up Kids show. should probably give the date of the show - also since they have since performed other shows and gotten back together, should the caption reflect this too?

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 19:35, 27 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]