Wikipedia:Peer review/The O.C. (season 2)/archive1
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I will list this for FL when I return from a wikibreak but see no reason to leave an inactive peer review open. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 20:16, 17 August 2008 (UTC)
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Hi I'm interested in getting this to featured list standard, but am keen not to use WP:FLC as a peer review, so would like some feedback first before I list it.
Many thanks, Rambo's Revenge (talk) 06:31, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
- Comments from Matthewedwards (talk · contribs)
- "It continues to the stories about the characters living in Newport." -- Remove the "to"
Done
- Please don't pipelink Newport, as this will give extra context and understanding to the reader
- Done
- Why the hyphens in "Ryan-and-Marissa and Seth-and-Summer"?
- Done
- Use American English on US topics. "whilst" is British English and considered archaic in the US; "while" is more commonly used
- Done, thanks I didn't know that.
- "documented the shows impact" -- possessive apostrophy needed
- Done
- "under the title of The O.C.: The Complete Second Season" -- no need for "of"
- Done
- "The second season is yet to be released on any iTunes Store." Why mention it, then?
- Done, yes sorry, good point it. That was rather WP:CRYSTALBALL of me as with the first season was recently released, it was there to remind me to include the second "when" it was released.
- "The executive producers were creator" -- perhaps "series creator"?
- Done
- "written out of the show" -- "the series" is more American
- Done
- In the episode table, the black text is a bit hard to see against the dark blue. Could you either lighten the blue, or change the text to white?
- Done, went with white.
- "tension fills the air in the Cohen family is desperate to convince Seth, who ran away at the beginning of the summer, to return home." huh?
- Done, yes huh indeed.
- Done
- Is savetheoc.wordpress.com a fansite or official? If it's a fansite, it doesn't belong in the WP:EL.
- Done, happy to remove but can you clarify why it fails. It is a fansite but it includes detailed guest appearances which are not covered by WP:RS's.
- I just see a lot of fansites get removed from ELs in other TV articles, including those that I work on. I assumed it was part of the guideline but I can't find it anywhere, and WP:MOSTV#External links doesn't disallow it either.. I guess I was wrong! :) Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 01:14, 14 August 2008 (UTC)
Looks good. Shouldn't be too long before it appears at FLC, I think. Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 00:27, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
- Thanks, once again, for your help in peer reviewing. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 22:50, 13 August 2008 (UTC)