Wikipedia:Peer review/Thoratec/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to bring it A or GA status.
Thanks in advance, Leifern (talk) 20:58, 29 January 2010 (UTC)
Crimsonfox's Comments
It is going to need a fair bit of work to get it up to GA standard, but the first thing I think should be done is get all those lists made up into prose. All of that information can be represented using paragraphs and no lists.
- Generally needs expansion and the text needs tightening.
- There's some one sentence paragraphs which should either be expanded or merged with other paragraphs.
- No text at all under "Studies", unless the heading after is meant to be part of it
- Paragraphs and statements with no references
- Regarding structure, I think "Milestones" and "Innovations" and "Studies"(or what's supposed to be under it) can be included under history. They seem to be the main achievements of the company so they would naturally be a major part of their history.
It's hard to do a full review of the text in an incomplete format. Once the lists are expanded, a more thorough review can be done. If it helps, try looking at some FA articles in the same field such as Microsoft or NeXT. I hope this gets the article on its way up. CrimsonFox talk 00:32, 4 February 2010 (UTC)