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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to take it to Good article status.
Thanks, MaRAno FAN 14:30, 9 February 2015 (UTC)
- Alright, I've finally finished my comments. Here they are:
- General comments
- For the named references, there are three different URLs each under the "RIAA" named reference. These three should be separate as they link to URLs each about a different song (All About That Bass, Lips Are Movin', Dear Future Husband).
- You have several instances were periods and commas are outside of quotation marks, and in American English, periods should be within quotes unless it's a partial quote. See MOS:LQ.
- Lead
- I recommend changing 'their' to 'her' and avoid repeating 'debut' at the end of the second paragraph. In other words, it might read like: "...the thirteenth woman in history to have her debut single and her debut album
debutatop...".
- Production
- Add comma after "On August 30" in first paragraph, remove comma after "on October 14" in second paragraph.
- Writing and inspiration
- Add comma after on Title in first sentence of second paragraph, and remove extraneous single quote after 'world?' in the quote that follows.
- At the end of the 3rd paragraph, you have a quote from John Legend which is actually a recollection of Legend's quote by Trainor. You may clarify this or at least include a semicolon after "I love this". The semicolon is not in the quote from the source, but would be more gramatically correct that way.
- Music and lyrics
- In the first paragraph, blue link to riddim.
- Songs
- In the first line of the second paragraph, insert a comma after "Close Your Eyes".
- In the fourth paragraph, add hyphen in "nextdoor" to create "the funny girl-next-door".
- Promotion
- In the last line, you say "The tour will begin on February 11, 2015". This can be changed to "The tour began..." as that happens to be today as of this writing.
- Critical reception
- In the second paragraph, be sure to render "naïveté" with the accent marks. You can cut and paste from here if need be or see Naivety for spellings.
- Commercial performance
- Similar to my comments under "lead" above, be sure to avoid overusing commas and the word 'debut' in the final two sentences.
- Overall, it looks great. In particular, I liked the analysis of the songs and the influences from various artists and genres across the 20th century. Good luck with the GA review. Tonystewart14 (talk) 23:00, 11 February 2015 (UTC)