Wikipedia:Peer review/Trey Lewis/archive1
- A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for October 2008.
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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to know what can be done to help improve the article and want to see how the article currently ranks.
Thanks, - -The Spooky One (talk to me) 00:36, 12 October 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- The lead needs to be expanded per WP:LEAD.
- Any chance of a free image of him? Have you checked on Flickr?
- Spell out abbreviations before their first use, for example ACL in the lead.
- The flow of the article is broken up by the many one or two sentence paragraphs - I would combine these with others or perhaps expand them
- Avoid the use of words like "currently" as the situation will change with time. Instead say things like "As of October 2008..."
- The {{Rquote}} template is a variation of the {{Cquote}} template and should not be used for quotes that are not pull quotes, per WP:MOSQUOTE
- I think if the title of the article is in English, the assumption is that the article is too (no need to add "in ENglish" to the ref)
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 04:07, 19 October 2008 (UTC)