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Villa Park

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I've requested a peer review to get some feedback on recent changes I have made to the article with regards to a FAC in the future. I'm particularly interested in people's opinions on the prose. The article is already a GA and I follows the same sort of structure as most Featured association football stadium articles (eg Old Trafford, Portman Road etc. Many thanks for your time. Woody (talk) 17:38, 11 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Infobox seems to be missing the odd "stand" (for instance, "... and The Doug Ellis to the ...")
"is under a mile" -> less than a mile.
"England internationals at senior level" some kind of link to England national football team wouldn't go amiss here.
"It has hosted 16 England internationals at senior level. The first international was in 1899 with the most recent being in 2005." merge.
" Villa Park is the most used stadium in FA Cup semi-final history" reword perhaps to "has hosted more FA Cup semi-finals than any other stadium" and link FA Cup.
"The 1999 UEFA Cup Winners' Cup Final was held at Villa Park, the last ever final of the European Cup Winners' Cup. " would have "the last ever..." before "was held at Villa Park"
Be consistent on capitalisation of stand "North stand" vs "North Stand" for instance.
Infobox - Trinity Rd->Trinity Road.
Infobox - £25M - not sure I've seen M used for millions for money. But that's just me.
History quote needs a proper reference (in the references section) including isbn, publisher etc.
Seems a little whimsical to open the history section with a direct quote like that as well.
"The previous location of Aston Villa..." not really, perhaps "Aston Villa's previous home..." or something.
"to an estimated crowd of 15,000" when it opened, was there some kind of event that drew this 15,000 or was the ground simply able to host 15,000?
"21 year" hyphenate.
" the construction of a new cycle track constructed " - quick repeat of "construct" here.
Suggest linking "snagging".
"could house 40,000 spectators most of whom" comma before most.
"one week after Aston Villa" don't relink Villa here.
Holte Hotel caption doesn't need a full stop.
"at a cost of £887. At a cost of £1,300, t" repetitive.
"£8250," (etc) comma needed to separate thousands.
You have "Blackburn Rovers" but "Everton F.C." - be consistent.

That takes me two paras into History. Hope this has been useful so far, will continue to review if prompted (although I am away this long weekend, so patience!). The Rambling Man (talk) 18:23, 18 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Very useful thanks, take all the time you need. I've fixed all those issues above apart from snagging, I couldn't find a link for that. I've removed the Billy Walker quote as it was a bit fawning wasn't it. I had been wondering about it when I rewrote the section but you confirmed it for me. Thanks again, regards, Woody (talk) 21:38, 18 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You're welcome. I'll try another section or three tomorrow. All the best. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:39, 18 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks again. Take your time, on Sunday I have an appointment with Sky Sports and apparently Mr Pires now. As a note, I didn't do the European Final sentence in the lead either as I couldn't see another way of keeping both a link to the final and to the Cup article. Regards, Woody (talk) 21:44, 18 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Pires. One of my favourites. Top three with Kanchelskis and Lee Sharpe. Odd, I know, but there you have it. Good luck v Blackburn, don't fancy your chances but then again, I'm a Tractor Boy so what would I know?! The Rambling Man (talk) 21:48, 18 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]