Wikipedia:Peer review/Washington State Route 203/archive1
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This article may be Washington State's next GA after an overhaul. I recently expanded it and would like some comments and suggestions. Thanks, –CG 17:57, 25 May 2009 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: This seems to me to be in pretty good shape. I have a few suggestions about prose issues, and I made a small number of minor proofing changes as I went through the article.
Lead
- "State Route 203 (SR 203) is a Washington state highway located in King and Snohomish counties." - Delete "located"?
- "The 24.26-mile (39.04 km) long route that begins at an intersection with SR 202 in Fall City." - Delete "long"? Delete "that"?
Route description
- "SR 203 runs north past NE Tolt Hill Road to cross the Tolt River into Carnation." - I'm inclined to spell out Northeast and similar terms when they are parts of formal street names. Most readers probably know or can guess what NE means, but some might not get it.
- "South of the US 2 intersection, an estimated 15,000 motorists utilized Lewis Street daily based on average annual daily traffic (AADT) data collected by the Washington State Department of Transportation." - The Manual of Style prefers "use" to "utilize", and perhaps it would be best to specify the year of the data; i.e. "an estimated 15,000 motorists used Lewis Street daily in YYYY... ".
History
- "Lewis Street became the first portion of the highway to be paved, which Monroe did in 1912." - Suggestion: "Lewis Street became the first portion of the highway to be paved when the City of Monroe improved it in 1912". If you know what the city paved it with, that would be an interesting detail to add, and then you could substitute "added concrete" or "added bricks" for "improved". I'm suggesting "City of" because "Monroe" at first glance might sound like a person.
- "During 2002, the first 4 miles (6.44 km) stretch of the highway suffered from four fatal collisions... " - It's odd to see the imperial units rounded to a whole number and the metric units rounded to the nearest hundredth. You could use 4.00 mi, or you could round to 6 km. I think the latter is easier to read and that the level of precision here does not matter very much. Also, is "suffered" the right word? Highways don't literally suffer. Suggestion: "During 2002, four fatal collisions occurred along the first 4-mile (6 km) stretch of the highway.." I added adj=on to the template to make the hyphen. The "adj" stands for "adjective".
- "... and WSDOT responded by retrieving funding for a new project that would install... " - Is "retrieving" the right word? "Obtaining"? Also, would "to install" be better than "that would install"?
- "A similar project will take place on the 6.19-mile (9.96 km) stretch in Snohomish County, where there were 348 collisions since 2002, 120 causing injuries." - Instead of "where there were 348 collisions since 2002", it might be better to say "where 348 collisions occurred between 2002 and 2009" if 2009 is the right end date. This will prevent the statement from becoming untrue as time passes and more wrecks occur.
"References
- I tried to fix the p. + pp. duplication in citation 3 by switching to "section", which "cite map" can handle. I think this is probably better, but an even better fix might be possible. Also, I wondered if this citation should have an access date since it does not have an url. I think "access date" in the Wikipedia citations indicates the last time the source was accessed on-line. Thus, an off-line source would have no access date but simply a publication date. When urls change or die, the access date sometimes helps editors find a new url or otherwise figure out how to fix a link-rot problem.
Images
- Nice photos. Image:DSCN0452.JPG lacks a description on its license page. It and the other road photo could include the direction of the photo; i.e, looking north, facing east, or whatever, as well as other identifying information. Both images could be uploaded to the Commons, which is used more widely than the English Wikipedia by itself.
I hope these few suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 17:14, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks, Finetooth! I've just put these in and shortly will take care of the images, though Image:DSCN0452.JPG's creator hasn't been on Wikipedia since 2006 and I can't find him anywhere. –CG 22:43, 3 June 2009 (UTC)