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I've listed this article for peer review because Ive made large changes and contributions. I would like to know how I can improve the article.
Thanks, LouriePieterse (talk) 12:14, 16 May 2009 (UTC)
I have done a basic copyedit, and added a couple {{citation needed}} tags which need addressing. -RunningOnBrains(talk page) 19:51, 22 May 2009 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article, here are some suggestions for improvement.
- Please see WP:LEAD - the lead needs to be expanded to 2 or 3 paragraphs for an article this long. The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way.
- Article needs more references, for example the last paragraph in Design has no refs. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
- Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- Images are all up for possible deletion - any way to clear up their copyright status?
- Writing seems decent, but there are places that seem like they could be original research, especially without refs. FOr example The production of a modern service type for the R.A.F. is largely a utilities competition. One should also remember that many a designer has failed to get his machine accepted, not because its performance was inferior to that of other types in the same class, but because one of the utilities was not as good as the corresponding one on another machine.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:57, 24 May 2009 (UTC)
Nigel Ish comments:
- Big chunks of the text seem very similar to This article in Flight magazine. This probably needs rewriting to avoid accusations of copyvio.
- The Flight International references need fuller details (and it was known as Flight at the time) - links to Flight's web archive would help. If you want to use cite templates then cite journal would be appropriate, although other ways of formatting references are available.
- What makes Virtual Air Museum a RS? Ditto 1000 aircraft photos?Nigel Ish (talk) 08:48, 24 May 2009 (UTC)