Talk:John Jonathon Pratt/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 02:36, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Link South Carolina

Done

Link Hammond Typewriter

Done

Early life

"graduated from Cokesbury high school in 1849" - If the school had that exact name, it should be Cokesbury High School

Done - Cokesbury college.

Mid life

Ref 5 makes it clear that he sold his slaves and other property to help finance the England trip and the typewriter. Add this?

Done

"Pratt exhibited his typewriter in London in 1867 at the Royal Society of Arts, the Society of United Kingdom Engineers, and the Royal Society of Great Britain." - Did he exhibit it at or to these societies?

Done

"The Pratt article describes in detail the function and process of Pratt's finger-operated machine" - Unclear which one is the Pratt article.

@Hog Farm: Not sure what you mean here. Reference #9 gives page number of 55 and date of 2003. Clicking on link gives page 55 that explains hit with a hammer when the pianolike keys were struck. I'm sure I can fix it, but at this point I am confused what you mean. Thanks for some additional input on this. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:19, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done

The paragraph starting with the above sentence is all in the present tense, while the rest of the article is in the past tense. My recommendation would be to rewrite that article to make it past tense.

@Hog Farm: I assume you mean "rewrite that paragraph" instead of "rewrite that article". I wrote it then as Pratt had developed... = will that take care of it? --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:19, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the confusion. I'm referring to the phrase "the Pratt article". Several articles in the preceding couple sentences could be that. Also, yeah, I meant paragraph.Hog Farm _Bacon 21:28, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done

" The patent as recorded at the United States Patent Office describes the machine as having three rows of 36 different type letter symbols each selected accordingly to be printed" - The "each selected accordingly to be printed" part is reading rough to me.

Done

Personal life

Is cause of death known?

Done

Infobox

Drop the employer parameter from the infobox.

Done

References

Ref 1 needs the author
Ref 5 the author is Will I. Martin
Add the two authors for ref 4
Ref 15 needs the author
Ref 11 needs the author
Refs 20 and 22 needs the publisher and date.
Ref 13 needs the author.
I'm not sure if ref 27 is reliable, since it's by a "guest blogger"
The Chataquan source actually is by P. G. Hubert, Jr.
The Chapman source doesn't actually have an author, so just leave that parameter blank. It's also by Chapman Publishing, not Arcadia Publishing
Provide locations for the book publishers
The Owen source actually has two authors. Also, the word Publishing in the publisher field should be capitalized.
The White ref doesn't seem to have an author, leave it blank then
The Pfrem source, the publisher is Bloomsbury, not Bloomsburg
Does Pfrem have an ISBN?
Do Iles and Bailey have OCLCs?
Done All these issues above have been addressed.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:35, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I've got a question about his middle name: Why the spelling here? Jonathan and Johnathan seem to be the more common ones. One idea would be to move the article to John J. Pratt, which isn't taken, and then pick the most commonly used spelling, and then create a footnote at the first mention explaining that spellings vary. If you're gonna move the article, wait until after the GA review closes. It creates a mess to move something during a GA review. = O.K. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:35, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, so that's the first round. I'll give it another go-over after these get answered. Hog Farm _Bacon 19:40, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Working - Starting to resolve issues. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:48, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: All the issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:35, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]